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Comparative Chart by Category: Words and Phrases

     “Words and Phrases” is one of the major categories since a lot of variations occur across the editions in terms of insertion and deletion of words or phrases and change of words or phrases or their order in a sentence. While skimming through some chapters of Summer, I noticed an interesting alteration made to the MME. In Chapter 10, the MME has deleted “whore” and “damn” from two sentences where Mr. Royall verbally abuses Charity at the fair. Both “whore” and “damn” exist in the MSS and are retained in both the FAE and the FBE. However, “damn” appears in MME in several sections––for example, Mr. Royall says “I am a damn fool” in Chapter 1 (MME, p. 10, Feb 1917) and the unnamed young man from the Mountain uses “damn you” twice in Chapter 16 (MME, p. 56, July 1917 ). Thus, I wonder if the omission of “whore” in the MME has to do with the reading culture of early twentieth century. Particularly, since McClure’s Magazine was published for popular audience, I wonder if the deletion was meant to save its audience from the shock of reading such an abusive word.
 
Chapter
&
Criteria		MSS

*YCAL MSS 42 box 12 f. 360
MME

*Issue May 1917		 FAEEWPFAE
 		 FBE
Ch 10
Word Del 		You whore––you damn––bare-headed whore, you!” he enunciated slowly. (176)

Note: The MSS does not have quotation marks before ‘You.’ But it has the end quote after ‘you!”’
 		“You––you––bare-headed––, you!” he enunciated slowly.  
 (65)		 “You whore––you damn––bare-headed whore, you!” he enunciated slowly.  
(151)		 “You whore––you damn––bare-headed whore, you!” he enunciated slowly.  
(151)		 “You whore––you damn––bare-headed whore, you!” he enunciated slowly.  
(78)
Ch 10
Word Del		“I said: you––damn––whore!’” he repeated with precision, steadying himself on Julia’s shoulder. (178)“I said: you––!’” he repeated with precision, steadying himself on Julia’s shoulder. (65)“I said, ‘You––damn––whore!’” he repeated with precision, steadying himself on Julia’s shoulder. (152)“I said, ‘You––damn––whore!’” he repeated with precision, steadying himself on Julia’s shoulder. (152)“I said: you––damn––whore!’” he repeated with precision, steadying himself on Julia’s shoulder. (78)
 


Comparative Chart: Words and Phrases 

 
No.Chapter
&
Criteria		Summer,
First American Edition (FAE) 		Summer,
First American Edition
with Wharton’s corrections (EWPFAE)
 		Summer,
First British Edition
(FBE)
 
  1.  
Ch 1
Word
Change		. . . June afternoon its few able-bodied men are . . . (9)
 		 . . . June afternoon its few able-bodied citizens are . . . (4)
  1.  
Ch 1
Word Del 		. . . had not prevented her from understanding them . . . (10)
 		 . . . had not prevented her understanding them . . . (4)
  1.  
Ch 1
Word
Change
 		. . . had previously failed to excite. (10) . . . had hitherto failed to excite. (4)
  1.  
Ch 1
Word Change
 		. . . occasion in her life: “My child, you must never cease to remember that it was Mr. Royall who brought you down from the Mountain.” (11)
 		 . . . occasion in her life, “My child, you must never cease to remember that it was Mrs. Royall who brought you down from the Mountain.” (5)
  1.  
Ch 1
Word Change
 		. . . of gloom to the lonely valley . . . (11) . . . of gloom to the lonely village . . . (5)
  1.  
Ch 1
Word Change
 		. . . can’t dust all these books. (16) . . . can’t dust all those books. (8)
  1.  
Ch 1
Word Ins
 		. . . he said again. She knew . . . (19) . . . he said again; and she knew . . . (9)
  1.  
Ch 2
Word Change
 		 . . . intensified by her joy at escaping from . . . (21) . . . intensified by the joy at escaping from . . . (10)
  1.  
Ch 2
Word Del
 		. . . at intervals, “Uncle Tom’s Cabin,” or “Opening of a Chestnut Burr,” or Longfellow. (22). . . at intervals, “Uncle Tom’s Cabin,” or “Opening a Chestnut Burr,” or Longfellow. (22). . . at intervals, “Uncle Tom’s Cabin” or “Opening a Chestnut Burr,” or Longfellow. (11)
 
  1.  
Ch 2
Word Change		. . . rows of potatoes strayed vaguely . . . (23)
 		 . . . rows of potatoes straggled vaguely . . . (11)
  1.  
Ch 2
Word Ins		 . . . has been told that she . . . (24) . . . has been told afterward that she . . . (12)
 
  1.  
Ch 2
Word Change
 		. . . commemorate Mr. Royall’s disinterestedness in “bringing her down” . . . (24)
 		 . . . commemorate Mrs. Royall’s disinterestedness in “bringing her down” . . . (12)
  1.  
Ch 2
Word Change
 		. . . knew why he had come back . . . (24) . . . knew why Lawyer Royall had come back . . . (12)
  1.  
Ch.2
Phrs Ins
Word Change
 		He wound up confidentially: “I was a damn fool . . . (28)  “After all,” he said confidentially, “I was a damn fool . . . (14)
  1.  
Ch 2
Word Change		She was awakened by . . . (28) She was wakened by . . . (14)
  1.  
Ch 2
Word Order		. . . turned slowly away from the door. . . (29)
 		 . . . slowly turned away from the door. . . (14)
  1.  
Ch 2
Word Change
 		. . . ear to her keyhole she . . . (29) . . . ear to the keyhole she . . . (14)
  1.  
Ch 2
Phrs Ins		. . . heard him, after an interval, unlock the door . . . (29)
 		 . . . heard him unlock the door . . . (15)
  1.  
Ch 2
Word Change
 		“. . . it was Mr. Royall who brought you down from the Mountain.” (31-32)
 		 “. . . it was Mrs. Royall who brought you down from the Mountain.” (16)
  1.  
Ch 2
Word Ins		“. . . earn money for?” he asked. (32) “. . . earn money for?” he asked at length. (16)
 
  1.  
Ch 2
Phrs Change
 		Or I’ll drive you down to Hepburn to the Justice, and get it done there. (33-34)
 		 Or I’ll drive you down to Hepburn, to the Justice there. (17)
  1.  
Ch 2
Phrs Ins
 		“That’ll do—that’ll about do,” he said. (35)
 		 “That’ll do—that’ll about do,” he said in a changed voice. (17)
  1.  
Ch 2
Phrs Del
 		. . . that Charity had been appointed librarian of the Hatchard Memorial at a salary of eight dollars a month, and . . . (35)
 		 . . . that Charity had been appointed librarian of the Hatchard Memorial, and . . . (17)
  1.  
Ch 3
Word Change
 		. . . spent either at the store or in driving about the country . . . represented, or in sitting at home reading Bancroft’s History of the United States and the speeches of Daniel Webster. (37)
 		 . . spent either in the store, in driving about the country . . . represented, or in sitting at home reading Bancroft’s “History of the United States,” or the speeches of Daniel Webster. (18)
  1.  
Ch 3
Word Change
 		Charity suspected that . . . (38) Charity imagined that . . . (19)
  1.  
Ch 3
Phrs Change
 		. . . permitted the freest interchange of confidences. (40) . . . permitted the completest freedom of speech. (20)
  1.  
Ch 3
Punc
Word Change
 		. . . from the table, he looked back at Charity, who had . . . (40) . . . from the table he looked back to Charity, who had . . . (20)
  1.  
Ch 3
Word Del
 		“I want to speak to you a minute,” he said; (41)
 		 “I want to speak to you,” he said; (20)
  1.  
Ch 3
Word Change
 		. . . in his black horse-hair armchair, and . . . (41) . . . in his high-backed armchair, and . . . (20)
  1.  
Ch 3
Word Del
 		Charity’s smouldering resentment broke into . . . (41)
 		 Charity’s resentment broke into . . . (20)
  1.  
Ch 3
Word Del
 		. . . in the dreamy remembrance of young Harney’s visit . . . (42)
 		 . . . in the remembrance of young Harney’s visit . . . (21)
  1.  
Ch 3
Word Ins		. . . told Miss Hatchard the books were in bad shape . . . (42)
 		 . . . told Miss Hatchard that the books were in bad shape . . . (21)
  1.  
Ch 3
Word Order
 		. . . she felt, without knowing what hurt her . . . (42-43)  . . . she felt, without what knowing hurt her . . . (21)
  1.  
Ch 4
Word Change
 		. . . the stern rosewood desk surmounted . . . (50) . . . the grim rosewood desk surmounted . . . (25)
  1.  
Ch 4
Word Change
 		. . . the portrait of the young Honorius. (50) . . . the effigy of the young Honorius. (25)
  1.  
Ch 4
Word Ins
 		. . . and turning back to her abruptly . . . (50)
 		 . . . and turning to her abruptly . . . (25)
  1.  
Ch 4
Phrs Change
 		. . . fact of having lived in Nettleton that made lawyer Royall . . . (51)
 		 . . . fact of coming from Nettleton that made Lawyer Royall . . . (25)
  1.  
Ch 4
Phrs Change
 		. . . this young man had lived in bigger places than Nettleton . . . (51)
 		 . . . this young man came from bigger places than Nettleton . . . (25)
  1.  
Ch 4
Spell Conv
 		. . . wait till tomorrow . . . (52) . . . wait till to-morrow . . . (26)
  1.  
Ch 5
Word Change
 		. . . above a sunlit hollow . . . (53) . . . above a sunlit valley . . . (27)
  1.  
Ch 5
Word Change		. . . butterfly the sight of a man’s foot . . . (54)
 		 . . . butterfly the vision of a man’s foot . . . (54)
  1.  
Ch 5
Word Change
 		. . . was to come up. . . . (56) . . . wos to come up . . . (28)
  1.  
Ch 5
Phrs Ins
 		“. . . these parts drawing pictures.” (57)
 		 “. . . these parts drawing pictures of old houses.” (29)
  1.  
Ch 5
Word Ins
 		. . . offer to explain this statement. (57) . . . offer to explain this unintelligible statement. (29)
 
  1.  
Ch 5
Punc
 		. . . brown house, and go all over . . . (57) . . . brown house and go all over . . . (29)
  1.  
Ch 5
Word Change
 		. . . Liff echoed incredulously. (58) . . . Liff echoed, weakly laughing. (29)
  1.  
Ch 5
Word Form
 		What d’you want . . . (58) What’d you want . . . (29)
  1.  
Ch 5
Word Change
 		. . . like the woman she had . . . (60) . . . like the witch-woman she had . . . (30)
  1.  
Ch 5
Word Change
 		The thought brought him back to the central point in her mind . . . (60)The thought brought her back to the central point in her mind . . . (60)The thought brought him back to the central point in her mind . . . (30)
 
  1.  
Ch 5
Phrs Change
 		. . . he would abruptly pull up their horse . . . (61) . . . he would suddenly hitch their horse . . . (31)
  1.  
Ch 5
Phrs Change
 		. . . the Mountain thrust itself up menacingly against a yellow sunset. (64)
 		 . . . the Mountain thrust up its black shoulder against a yellow sunset. (33)
  1.  
Ch 5
Phrs Change
 		. . . blood bathed her to the forehead. (67) . . . blood bathed her to the roots of her hair. (34)
  1.  
Ch 6
Word Change
 		. . . of a widowed sister, and . . . (68) . . of a widowed sister-in-law, and . . . (35)
  1.  
Ch 6
Word Ins		. . . Mr. Royall consented. (69)
 		 . . . Mr. Royall had consented. (35)
  1.  
Ch 6
Word Del
Phrs Ins		. . . poorer than people knew. (69) . . . poorer than was commonly supposed. (35)
 
  1.  
Ch 6
Word Ins		. . . but she knew he felt . . . (70)
 		 . . . but she knew that he felt . . . (36)
  1.  
Ch 6
Punc
 		. . . “Oh yes: there was a mother . . .” (73)
 		 . . . “Oh yes; there was a mother . . .” (37)
  1.  
Ch 6
Word Ins		Mr. Royall’s was the only house where the young man could have been offered a decent hospitality. (75)
 		 Mr. Royall’s was really the only house where the young man could have been offered a decent hospitality. (38)
  1.  
Ch 6
Word Del
 		. . . in separate beads that . . . (79) . . . in beads that . . . (40)
  1.  
Ch 6
Phrs Change
 		. . . reached the yoke of the hills . . . (79) . . . reached the top . . . (40)
  1.  
Ch 6
Word Change
 		. . . more blue heights eddying . . . (79) . . . more blue hills eddying . . . (40)
  1.  
Ch 6
Word Ins
 		. . . away to the sky like . . . (79) . . . away to the blue sky like . . . (40)
  1.  
Ch 6
Word Change
 		. . . of which bumblebees darted. (79) . . . of which humble-bees darted. (40-41)
  1.  
Ch 6
Phrs Change
 		. . . there was a little deserted house . . . (80) . . . there was another house . . . (41)
  1.  
Ch 6
Word Change
 		. . . her glance and smiled. “Is it that scrap of cloud . . . (80) . . . her glance and smiled: “Is it that thread of cloud . . . (41)
 
  1.  
Ch 6
Word Change
 		. . . on a furious gale, laying . . . (82) . . . on a sudden gale, laying . . . (42)
  1.  
Ch 6
Word Change
 		. . . hissing pools of every hollow. (82) . . hissing pools of the hollows. (42)
  1.  
Ch 6
Word Ins
 		. . . for she moved about as noiselessly . . . (84)
 		 . . . for she moved about as noiselessly as they . . . (43)
  1.  
Ch 6
Word Ins		. . . and dozed again, his head . . . (85) . . . and dozed off again, his head . . . (43)
  1.  
Ch 6
Word Change		. . . the rain still streamed against the windows . . . (85)
 		 . . . the torrents still streamed against the windows . . . (43)
  1.  
Ch 6
Word Change		She thought of the kitchen at Mr. Royall’s . . . (85)
 		 She remembered of the kitchen at the red house . . . (44)
  1.  
Ch 6
Phrs Ins
 		. . . white spaniel on a moss-green border. (85). . . white spaniel in a moss-green border. (85). . . white spaniel on a moss-green border that lay before it. (44)
 
  1.  
Ch 6
Phrs Ins 		Harney untied the horse, and they drove off . . . (87) Harney untied the horse and folded the horse-blanket about Charity, and they drove off . . . (45)
 
  1.  
Ch 6
Word Ins		Why did you put it back?” (88)
 		 Why did you put it back again?” (45)
  1.  
Ch 7
Word Change
 		. . . a thirst for letters . . . (90) . . . a thirst for literature . . . (46)
  1.  
Ch 7
Phrs Ins
 		. . . and Miss Hatchard, always full of scruples about her scruples . . . (93). . . and Miss Hatchard, always full of scruples, and of scruples about her scruples . . . (93). . . and Miss Hatchard, always full of scruples, and of scruples about her scruples . . . (48)
 
  1.  
Ch 7
Word Change
 		. . . she’s waiting for Mr. Harney.” (97) . . . she’s watching for Mr. Harney.” (50)
  1.  
Ch 7
Word Ins
 		. . . a clump of lilies in . . . (99) . . . a clump of June lilies in . . . (51)
  1.  
Ch 7
Word Del
 		. . . the sudden change in . . . (105) . . . the change in . . . (54)
  1.  
Ch 8
Word Change
 		. . . last effort of indifference . . . (110) . . . last effort at indifference . . . (57)
  1.  
Ch 8
Word Del
 		“You lost girl . . . you . . . you . . . Oh, my God . . . (112)
 		 “You lost girl . . . you . . . Oh, my God . . . (58)
  1.  
Ch 8
Word Del
 		. . . head bowed down like . . . (112) . . . head bowed like . . . (58)
  1.  
Ch 8
Word Del		. . . and the other people . . . (114)
 		 . . . and the other low people . . . (59)
  1.  
Ch 8
Word Ins		. . . the last to want people to talk . . . (115)
 		 . . . the last to want envious people to talk . . . (59)
  1.  
Ch 8
Word Ins		. . . to take him to Hepburn . . . (118)
 		 . . . to take him down to Hepburn . . . (61)
  1.  
Ch 8
Word Change
 		. . . she arose in the . . . (122) . . . she rose in the . . . (63)
  1.  
Ch 9
Word Ins
 		. . . and cherry-coloured lining . . . (124)
 		. . . and a cherry-coloured lining . . . (124). . . and a cherry-coloured lining . . . (64)
  1.  
Ch 9
Phrs Ins		. . . her new hat carefully wrapped up, and . . . (127) . . . her hat carefully wrapped up in her handkerchief, and . . . (66)
 
  1.  
Ch 9
Word Change		. . . but Harney, except when he . . . (129)
 		 . . . but Harney, save when he . . . (66)
  1.  
Ch 9
Word Change
 		. . . and turned in at a small . . . (134) . . . and turned into a small . . . (69)
  1.  
Ch 9
Word Del
Word Order
 		. . . background of dark blue velvet, pins, rings and brooches glittered . . . (134) . . . background of blue velvet, brooches, rings, and pins glittered . . . (69)
  1.  
Ch 9
Word Del Word Change
 		. . . She stood staring down a row . . . (135) . . . She stared down a row . . . (69)
  1.  
Ch 9
Word Del		. . . party of showy-looking girls were . . . (135)
 		 . . . party of girls were . . . (70)
  1.  
Ch 9
Word Change
 		That “somewhere else” turned out— (137)The “somewhere else” turned out— (137)The “somewhere else” turned out— (70)
  1.  
Ch 9
Word Change
 		. . . the Lake, where she had not been taken on her former visit . . . (138)
 		 . . . the Lake, which she had not been taken to on her former visit . . . (71)
  1.  
Ch 9
Word Ins

 		. . . I’ll run you out to see the ball-game . . . (140). . . I’ll run you out first to see the ball-game . . . (140). . . I’ll run you out to see the ball-game . . . (72)
  1.  
Ch 10
Word Ins
 		. . . a big performance like this, illuminated boats, . . . (143). . .  a big performance like this: illuminated boats, . . . (143). . . a big performance like this. And illuminated boats, . . . (74)
 
  1.  
Ch 10
Phrs Change
 		. . . wearing badges of secret societies, with . . . (145) . . . wearing Masonic badges, with . . . (75)
  1.  
Ch 10
Phrs Ins 		. . . curtains of darkness were descending, and in the intervals of eclipse the voices of the crowds . . . (146) . . . curtains of darkness were descending more and more thickly; and in the intervals of eclipse the voices of the crowds . . . (75)
 
  1.  
Ch 10
Word Ins

 		. . . as the gang-plank lowered from . . . (150). . . as the gang-plank was lowered from . . . (150). . . as the gang-plank was lowered from . . . (77)
  1.  
Ch 10
Word Change
 		“. . . Here’s grandpa’s little daughter come to take him home!” (150)
 		“. . . Here’s grandpa’s little darling come to take him home!” (150)“. . . Here’s gran’pa’s little treasure come to take him home!” (77)
  1.  
Ch 10
Word Change
 		. . . by the hand-rail in . . . (150) . . . on the hand-rail in . . . (78)
  1.  
Ch 10
Word Change
 		. . . wore a secret society emblem . . . (150) . . . wore a Masonic emblem . . . (78)
  1.  
Ch 10
Word Ins
 		. . . had seen him, as she went up to bed . . . (152) . . . had seen him, often enough, as she went up to bed . . . (78)
 
  1.  
Ch 11
Word Ins
 		. . . what they said to each other, during . . . (154). . . what they had said to each other, during . . . (154). . . what they had said to each other during . . . (80)
 
  1.  
Ch 11
Word Change
 		. . . she had before supposed . . . (158) . . . she had then supposed . . . (82)
  1.  
Ch 11
Word Ins		. . . but a young man in a black alpaca coat, . . . (161)
 		 . . . but a fat young man in a black alpaca coat, . . . (161)
  1.  
Ch 11
Word Ins		. . . and climbing into the heart of the forest. (162)
 		 . . . and climbing up into the heart of the forest. (84)
  1.  
Ch 11
Word Change		“. . . not far from here; and the young man who is running the Gospel tent picked them up just as I was riding by.” (164)
 		 “. . . not far from here: and the young man who is running the Gospel tent picked them up just as I was driving by.” (85)
  1.  
Ch 11
Word Del
 		. . . in the sudden relief of her release from lonely pain, . . . (165)
 		. . . in the relief of her release from lonely pain, . . . (165). . . in the sudden relief of her release from lonely pain, . . . (85)
  1.  
Ch 12
Word Change
 		. . . garlands for the procession was the last . . . (173) . . . garlands for the proscenium was the last . . . (89)
  1.  
Ch 12
Word Change
 		The hemlock garland she was wearing fell to her knees and she sat in a kind of trance. (176)
 		 The hemlock garland she was weaving fell to her knees and she sat in a kind of trance. (91)
  1.  
Ch 12
Word Ins
 		. . . with an earthenware jar holding a big bunch of wild asters, two canvas chairs stood near by, and in one corner was a mattress with a Mexican blanket over it. (179). . . with an earthenware jar holding a big bunch of wild asters. Two canvas chairs stood near by, and in one corner was a mattress with a Mexican blanket over it. (179). . . with an earthenware jar holding a big bunch of wild asters; two canvas chairs stood near by, and in one corner was a mattress with a Mexican blanket thrown over it. (92)
 
  1.  
Ch 12
Phrs Ins
 		With part of what was left of her savings she had hired a bicycle for a month, and every day . . . (181) With what was left of the money Mr. Royall had given her she had hired a bicycle for a month; and every day . . . (93)
 
  1.  
Ch 12
Word Change
 		. . . his eyes were laughing in hers. (183) . . . his eyes were laughing into hers. (95)
  1.  
Ch 12
Phrs Change
 		Charity had spent more than she could afford on the dress, which . . . (187)
 		 Charity had spent her last penny on the dress, which . . . (97)
  1.  
Ch 13
Word Order
Word Change
 		 . . . who had come up from Nettleton to play the harmonium and sat behind it, his conductor’s eye running over the fluttered girls. (190). . . who had come up from Nettleton to play the harmonium and sat behind it running his conductor’s eye over the fluttered girls. (190)
 		. . . who had come up from Hepburn to play the harmonium and sat behind it running his conductor’s eye over the fluttered girls. (98)
  1.  
Ch 13
Word Ins		His frock-coat had been carefully brushed . . . (191)
 		 His black frock-coat had been carefully brushed . . . (98)
  1.  
Ch 13
Word Del Word Form
Phrs Ins
 		. . . involved in complicated relations––but she felt it all to be so far beyond her understanding . . . (197)
 		 . . . involved in complications––but she felt it all the time to be so far beyond her understanding . . . (101)
  1.  
Ch 13
Word Ins
 		. . . and then deadly apprehension. (198). . . and then a deadly apprehension. (198). . . and then a deadly apprehension. (102)
  1.  
Ch 14
Word Change
 		I saw her there sixteen years ago, when I went to bring this child down. (208)
 		 I saw her there fifteen years ago, when I went to bring this child down. (108)
  1.  
Ch 14
Phrs Change
Word Del
 		He did not look again at the young people: they saw him feel his way to the door and fumble for the latch; and then he went out into the darkness. (208)
 		 He did not look again at the lovers: they saw him feel his way to the door and fumble for the latch; then he went out into the darkness. (108)
  1.  
Ch 14
Word Del
Word Ins

 		It threw a queer shadow on his frowning forehead, and made the smile on his lips a grimace. (211)
 		 It threw queer shadows on his frowning forehead, and made the smile on his lips like a grimace. (109)
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Ch 15
Word Misc
(Verb Contr)
 		“It would not make it true if I did . . . (218)“It wouldn’t make it true if I did . . . (218)“It wouldn’t make it true if I did . . . (114)
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Ch 15
Word Change		The long storm was followed by a north-west gale, and when it was over, the hills took . . . (219)
 		 The long storm was followed by a north-west gale, and when it was over the woods took . . . (114)
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Ch 15
Word Del		. . . the uselessness of struggling against the circumstances. (220)
 		 . . . the uselessness of struggling against circumstances. (115)
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Ch 15
Word Change
 		But the whole sunlit autumn whirled, reeled and roared around her as she dragged herself . . . (222)
 		But the whole sunlit autumn world reeled and roared around her as she dragged herself . . . (222)But the whole sunlit autumn world reeled and roared around her as she dragged herself . . . (116)
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Ch 15
Word Change
 		. . . she went on hastily, with bent head, . . . (223) . . . she walked on hastily, with bent head, . . . (117)
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Ch 15
Word Ins
 		Charity gazed at her with widening eyes. (225)
 		 Charity gazed back at her with widening eyes. (117)
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Ch 15
Word Change 		. . . she had had to borrow four dollars from her friend to pay for her railway ticket and cover the doctor’s fee. (226)
 		 . . . she had had to borrow four dollars from her friend to pay her railway ticket and cover the doctor’s fee. (118)
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Ch 15
Word Change

 		. . . but if you’re a mind to leave that brooch as a pledge, I don’t say no. . . . (227). . . but if you’ve a mind to leave that brooch as a pledge, I don’t say no. . . . (227). . . but if you’re a mind to leave that brooch as a pledge, I don’t say no . . . (119)
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Ch 15
Word Change
 		. . . he had probably had his supper and walked over to Carrick Fry’s. (232) . . . he had probably had his supper and walked down to Carrick Fry’s. (121)
 
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Ch 15
Word Ins
 		. . . she did not want to make things hard. (234)
 		 . . . she did not want to make things hard for him. (122)
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Ch 15
Word Del		. . . her figure lost its shape she knew her face would betray her. (236)
 		 . . . her figure lost its shape her face would betray her. (123)
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Ch 15
Word Change		. . . the hemlock belt above the cemetery, and the . . . (236)
 		 . . . the hemlock belt about the cemetery, and the . . . (123)
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Ch 15
Word Order		To the east a space of light was broadening above the forest; (236)
 		 To the east a space broadening light was above the forest; (123)
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Ch 15
Phrs Ins
 		At any rate it began to loom against the rainy dawn; (236)At any rate it began to loom in her now as it loomed against the rainy dawn; (236)At any rate it began to loom in her again as it loomed against the rainy dawn; (123)
 
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Ch 16
Word Ins		. . . she was resolved to push beyond it, . . . (239)
 		 . . . she was resolved to push on beyond it, . . . (125)
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Ch 16
Word Change
 		“You know, then––you’d been told?” (241) “You knew, then––you’ve been told?” (126)
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Ch 16
Phrs Del 		. . . and a young man slouched to the door and stood there staring. (246)
 		 . . . and a young man slouched to the door. (128)
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Ch 16
Word Ins		. . . dropped down on the bench, leaning his head against the wall. (249)
 		 . . . dropped down on to the bench, leaning his head against the wall. (130)
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Ch 16
Word Change		. . . with lips parted in a frozen gasp above the broken teeth. (250)
 		 . . with lips parted in a frozen gap above the broken teeth. (131)
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Ch 16
Word Change
 		“. . . Where’d we get one here, I’d like ter know?” (250) “. . . Where’d we get one here I’d like to know?” (131)
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Ch 16
Word Misc
(Verb Agr)
 		“. . . them that has it sleeps better,” an old woman murmured. (250-251)
 		 “. . . them that has it sleep better,” an old woman murmured. (131)
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Ch 16
Phrase Del		. . . said the lank-haired man, on the defensive. (251)
 		 . . . said the lank-haired man. (131)
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Ch 16
Word Change

 		Though after my skin worms destroy my body, yet in my flesh shall I see God. . . . (251)
 		 Though after my skin worms destroy this body, yet in my flesh shall I see God . . . (131)
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Ch 16
Phrs Ins
Word Change

 		. . . and we shall take nothing out of it––––” (251) . . . and it is certain we can carry nothing out––––” (131)
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Ch 16
Word Change
 		. . . said the elderly man with lank hair, . . . (252) . . . burst out the elderly man with lank hair, . . . (131)
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Ch 16
Word Change
 		“G’wan, minister . . . don’t let. ’em faze you. . . .” (252) “G’won, minister . . . don’t let’em faze you . . .” (132)
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Ch 16
Word Form
 		So when this corruption shall have put on incorruption, . . . (252-253) So when this corruptible shall have put on incorruption, . . . (132)
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Ch 16
Phrs Order 		. . . he muttered, spitting into his palm and passing his ragged shirt-sleeve across his perspiring face. (255)
 		 . . . he muttered, passing his ragged shirt-sleeve across his perspiring face and spitting into his palm. (133)
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Ch 17
Word Ins

 		. . . very soul seemed to be
sucked into it. (258)		. . . very soul seemed to be sucked up into it. (258). . . very soul seemed to be sucked up into it. (136)
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Ch 17
Word Ins



 		. . . as if the height of the heavens divided them. (259). . . as if the height of the heavens
had divided them. (259)		. . . as if the height of the heavens divided them. (136)
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Ch 17
Word Del		. . . they seemed to be herded together in a sort of passive promiscuity . . . (259)
 		 . . . they seemed herded together in a sort of passive promiscuity . . . (136)
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Ch 17
Word Del		. . . the night dragged themselves slowly by, and at last the sky . . . (260)
 		 . . . the night dragged slowly by, and at last the sky . . . (137)
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Ch 17
Word Change		. . . the light gradually spreading across the wintry world, . . . (260)
 		 . . . the light gradually spreading across a wintry world, . . . (137)
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Ch 17
Word Change		It was one of the dainty things on which she had squandered her savings, . . . (262)
 		 It was one of the pretty things on which she had squandered her savings, . . . (138)
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Ch 17
Word Ins		The morning was icy cold and a pale sun was just . . . (262) The morning was icy cold and a pale autumn sun was just . . . (138)
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Ch 17
Word Change		The houses scattered on the hillside lay cold and smokeless . . . (262)
 		 The houses scattered on the hillside lay black and smokeless . . . (138)
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Ch 17
Word Change
 		Charity walked across the field to the ground. (263)Charity walked across the field to the mound. (263)Charity walked across the field to the mound. (138)
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Ch 17
Word Ins
 		As she continued to climb the air grew keener, . . . (264) As she continued to climb the hill the air grew keener, . . . (139)
 
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Ch 17
Word Del		She bent her shoulders and struggled on against it . . . (264)
 		 She bent her shoulders and struggled against it . . . (139)
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Ch 17
Word Ins
 		. . . the Mountain falling away to infinite distances. (264) . . . the Mountain falling away at her feet to infinite distances. (139)
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Ch 17
Word Del
 		. . . the gaunt build of the old horse pressing forward with lowered head; (265)
 		 . . . the build of the old horse pressing forward with lowered head; (139)
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Ch 17
Word Del
 		Her first impulse was to crouch down under the ledge till he had passed; (265)
 		 Her first impulse was to crouch under the ledge till he had passed; (140)
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Ch 17
Word Ins		Mr. Royall saw her, and touched the horse with the whip. (265)
 		 Mr. Royall saw her, and touched the horse’s shoulder with the whip. (140)
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Ch 17
Word Ins
 		. . . they began to jog back toward Hamblin. (266) . . . they began to jog back along the trail toward Hamblin. (140)
 
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Ch 17
Word Ins
 		“Yes, I do,” she murmured, looking straight ahead of her. (267)
 		 “Yes, I do,” she murmured, still looking straight ahead of her. (140)
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Ch 17
Word Ins

 		They drove in silence, following the long loops . . . (267) They drove on in silence, following the long loops . . . (141)
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Ch 17
Word Change
 		Then he let the reins droop on the dashboard . . . (267) Then he let the reins drop on the dashboard . . . (141)
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Ch 18
Word Ins
 		He filled her cup and plate and whenever she lifted her eyes . . . (275)
 		 He filled her cup and her plate, and whenever she lifted her eyes . . . (145)
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Ch 18
Word Ins
Word Del		Only once, on the day of the Old Home Week celebration, while the stray fragments of his address drifted across her troubled mind . . . (275)
 		 Only once, when, on the day of the Old Home Week celebration, the stray fragments of his address drifted across her troubled mind . . . (145)
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Ch 18
Word Change
 		“. . . any impediment whereby ye may not be lawfully joined together . . .” (278)
 		 “. . . any impediment why ye may not be lawfully joined together . . .” (146)
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Ch 18
Word Del

 		. . . to understand the gestures that the clergy man was signaling to her . . . (278). . . to understand the gestures the clergy man was signaling to her . . . (278). . . to understand the gestures that the clergy man was signaling to her . . . (146)
 
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Ch 18
Word Ins
 		It lay enclosed in his strong palm and she felt a ring that was too big for her being slipped on her thin finger. She understood then that she was married. . . . (Regular/single space)
    Late that afternoon . . . (278)

 		It lay enclosed in his strong palm, and she felt a ring that was too big for her being slipped onto her thin finger. She understood then that she was married. . . . (Regular/single space)
    Late that afternoon . . . (278)		It lay enclosed in his strong palm, and she felt a ring that was too big for her being slipped on to her thin finger. She understood then that she was married . . .
(double space)

    Late that afternoon . . . (147)
 
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Ch 18
Word Form		. . . It was a large engraving with a dazzling white margin . . . (279)
 		 . . . It was a large engraving with a dazzlingly white margin . . . (147)
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Ch 18
Word Ins
 

 		He went up to the window to draw the blind, and putting . . . (281)He went up to the window to draw down the blind, and putting . . . (281)He went up to the window to draw the blind, and putting . . . (148)
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Ch 18
Phrs Ins
 		He knew, then . . . he knew . . . it was because he knew that he had married her, and that he sat there in the darkness to show her she was safe with him. (284) He knew, then . . . he knew . . . he had married her because he knew that, and it was because he knew that he sat there in the darkness to show her she was safe with him. (149)
 
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Ch 18
Word Ins
 		Now that there was no chance of ever seeing Harney again, why should she not tell him the truth? (289)
 		 Now that there was no chance of her ever seeing Harney again why should she not tell him the truth? (152)

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